美國留學個人陳述寫作非常重要，個人陳述能彌補你的硬件傷，為自己的申請加分，因此常常能決定申請的成敗。尤其是在美國留學申請競爭日趨激烈的今天，個人陳述的寫作更顯的重要。小編為大家總結了在寫個人陳述的開頭段時要注意的問題，避免被一眼秒拒掉。

　　一、重復簡歷型

　　I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university

　　點評：美國留學個人陳述不要去重復簡歷中的東西，這在很多學校的PS要求中明確提到，個人陳述的寫作要具體到事件上，事件解決上，而不要單純重復已有的內容。

　　二、學校介紹型

　　I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.

　　點評：該同學的個人陳述開頭等于是一個申請學校的簡介，這好像是在幫助學校做宣傳，或表達你有多了解該學校，而不是寫個人陳述了。這是沒有意義的開頭，白白浪費了字數，最容易被秒據掉。

　　三、抄襲句式型

　　As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.

　　點評：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 這種句式不知道是從哪里學到的，很多同學在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄襲，最喜原創，所以利害關系大家想想吧。

　　四、救世主型

　　I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, …

　　點評：一副救世主的形象，小時候就受富蘭克林的影響，立志改變世界。個人陳述的寫作一定要個人化具體化，別吹大牛，甚至帶著一種霸權主義思維。

　　五、猶抱琵琶型

　　Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

　　點評：重點放在自己要做重大決定上了，人生的轉折點，然后來上句所謂名言警句。浪費字數，有限的字數里，同學們應該學會直接，并且抓住重點，突出自己最有優勢的方面，最有特色的方面。

　　六、言幼稚型

　　'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky-' When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.

　　點評：上來就回憶童年少年自己如何有著遠大抱負，who cares。個人陳述字數有限，卻用這么多話描述童年，沒有任何意義。學校想知道你如何看待未來，而不是如何度過過去。

　　小編提醒大家，以上六種美國留學個人陳述的開頭方式一定要盡力避免，申請美國大學的申請人越來越多，申請競爭越來越激烈，大家精心準備的個人陳述希望成為大家被錄取的亮點，而不是成為大家申請成功的絆腳石。