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Veterinary Background

Changing the bandage on an angry bulldog’s paw or trimming the hooves of a 2000-pound draft horse can be an intimidating venture. Curing animals requires compassion, precision, and confidence; it is also an excellent way to learn about practicing medicine and to feel the satisfaction of helping someone in need. Due to my rural background, knowledge of animals, and love of science, I began working for a local veterinarian at a young age. Later in life, when I decided to become a physician, I saw that my veterinary experiences had prepared me well for a career in health care.

When I started volunteering in an emergency room, I learned that humans really aren't so different from other animals -- I needed to show my compassion in order to earn their trust before I could heal or comfort them. When a child or widow brought me their dying pet and pleaded for me to cure it, I had to soothe the person as well as the animal. I used this calm compassion in the emergency room when comforting the family of a father who had just suffered a heart attack, or when talking with a husband frantic about his wife’s car accident. I saw further similarities between human and animal medicine when I shadowed Dr. Harry Williams in his family practice. I saw that his close relationship with his patients led him to keep thinking of them long after his office closed for the day. Likewise, as a veterinary technician, I had often carefully considered how to help each animal. Compassion is truly a prerequisite for any career in health care.

In my work with animals, I learned that perseverance is key to successful treatment. Interruption of that treatment can lead to disastrous results. In many rural communities near my home, I witnessed the consequences of the absence of consistent medical care. As a farrier, I have worked in many old-order Mennonite communities whose needs aren’t being met: when one client's daughter injured her hand in a corn sheller, she was unable to get medical care because facilities were far away and no doctors could come to their farm. The girl’s hand was infected and not healing well. I did what I could, but I was troubled that I didn’t have the expertise to treat the injury. On my next visit, I saw that her hand had grown deformed. Had she been able to see a physician more frequently, her hand might have healed correctly. Encounters of this kind have revealed to me the consequences of medically underserved communities. I look forward to working toward a solution to this problem when I am a physician.

A good veterinarian operates with precision. I have applied the careful, exacting skills I learned with animals to my lab work. I am currently involved in research on corneal endothelium with Dr. Carson Kennedy. In the lab, we study mammalian corneal cells; eventually, we would like to describe and prevent ophthalmic diseases such as glaucoma. Through this work, I have honed my scientific skills and sharpened my analytical mind. It is exhilarating to catch a glimpse of valuable knowledge, not yet known by anyone, which has the potential to help many people. It is also very rewarding to know that I have contributed to the advancement of medicine by providing research results that will improve people’s health.

Perhaps the most important quality required to practice human or animal medicine is confidence. In the lab, in the emergency room, and in the field, I have had many opportunities to observe the importance of confident leadership to a medical practice. Over the years, I have observed that the best veterinarians and physicians handle each issue swiftly and appropriately, delegating tasks to others with self-assurance. In every medical situation, someone must take the lead role while working to manage the team. Leadership roles have always come naturally to me -- I spent twelve years working toward becoming an Eagle Scout and helping my younger brother to do the same. The composure I gained as a troop leader helped me to excel in my role as supervisor at a large walking horse farm. Since then, I have grown into leadership roles that required more significant responsibilities. I am comfortable as a leader because I am confident in my ability to ensure the health and safety of others. The leadership skills I have developed will be a vital part of my work as a physician.

When I began working as a veterinary technician, I did not fully realize that the skills I gained would be so applicable to my eventual career as a physician. Yet my experiences with animals have provided me with an excellent foundation to continue my studies of human health and well-being. I am eager to develop the medical knowledge I have gained thus far in order to become the kind of physician my community will be able to rely on.

結構解析：

這是一篇申請醫學的文章是很成功的。說實話我是很喜歡的。

我們看一下這篇文章的結構：

第一部分，開頭。

在這部分開門見山的點中了題目，獸醫的經歷。

第二部分，延伸引入。

光看了開頭讓人很迷惑，怎么獸醫的來申請醫學了呢。所以這里解釋引入一下，高速別人，我之前的經歷和和現在的申請有關系的。

第三部分，主體。

這里主要是在講自己的醫學上的經歷，跟老師做實驗也好，還是之前的社會活動，結合這些事情來說自己在醫學上的認識，非常的真實也令人信服。而且作者的邏輯性很強，由潛到深的敘述，一切都顯得那么自然。雖然很多東西都是專業的東西，但是結合他所說的東西并不顯得枯燥。

第四部分，升華。

通過對主體部分的總結，寫出了自己對專業的一些看法，領導能力對于外科醫生非常重要。并且詳細的寫出了自己的觀點。

第五部分，結尾

在升華的基礎上，點名了自己的目的，說出了自己的目標。

點評：

可以說這篇文章的格式是相當的標準的，一共是6段，分為很標準的5個部分。結構清晰，讓人可以很清晰的知道作者要表達的思想和內容。不像很多作者在做文章的時候太散太亂。這篇文章中我最喜歡的就是這點。而且這篇文章的中心很明確，并且用獸醫的經歷把整個文章串了起來。可以說獸醫的經歷就好像是一根繩子，牢牢的把各個部分有機的連接起來，讓人看到文章的時候第一個感覺就是整體感好。可以說，很多時候學生在做個人陳述的時候，都喜歡簡歷試的羅列，一個個人陳述洋洋灑灑的XX段，看得我頭都大了。并且都是一種純的羅列試描述，我做了什么，通過多少時間得到了什么結果，純的描述。沒有任何的邏輯思維，給人的一個感覺，就是亂。除了達到了簡歷的效果之外什么都得不到。亂糟糟的，我看了都頭疼，你想想那些天天看材料看到要吐的評審委員會成員們會怎么看你的這個東西呢？我想這個就不用我來說了吧。

良好的文章結構代表了良好的邏輯思維能力。這個是毋庸置疑的，并且從我得到的一些信息來看，我至少是相信一點，就是評審委員會的人在看你文章的時候，同時也是在看你的邏輯思維能力，畢竟做科研的人，沒有一個良好的邏輯思維能力是不可能的。專業固然重要，但是我們要掌握怎么去表現我們的專業。簡歷有簡歷的用處，有它應該體現的點，PS有PS應該體現的點，如果你想把簡歷做成PS，如果你想把PS組成簡歷，這是什么？前者，畫蛇添足；后者，照貓畫虎反類犬。都是四不像的東西，并且掩蓋住了我們本應該體現的點。這樣你真的就認為你的PS就是好的PS嗎？

好的PS不在于文章的形式，不在于內容怎么寫，不在于開頭怎么寫，沒有一個定式，沒有一個模板，沒有一個套路。但是核心是一樣的，體現我專業的深度，或能力。那么怎么把你的文章組織好，用一個很好的線串聯起來。邏輯思維的體現。切記簡歷試PS，你有沒有這樣的想法？有，必要改正。